考博作文批改范例：
Good Health
The desire for good health is universal.
Everyone
wish
（
注意主谓一致
） to have a healthy body
cause
（
because
）
the
（
删掉
） health is the most important. It can give us
drival
（
删掉
）strength.
In the society, many people don't
to
（
删掉
） pay much attention to their health. In my opinion,
we can through eating to become ours
.（
这句话的意思是？
） It is the best way to keep
our
（
删掉
）fit and save our money.
As everyones known
（
as everyone knows
）,
the vegetables are a lot better at the health than the meals
(
改成vegetables are much healthier than meat
).
There is much
(
there are many
) vitamins in it. The water is more important and the base
on our life
(
删掉，改成for our life
). We
shoule
(
拼写
)drink eight cups of
the
（
删掉定冠词
）water everyday. Therefore we can
full of the life
（
be full of energy
）through the method.
As a university student, I have not much work. So I can do many excises usually in my free time.
Such as swimming, running and badminton
.(
这不是一句完整的话，不能用句号结束，可以和前面一起连成一句话
) Many practices can not only keep
our
（
删掉
） fit but also keep our body
line
（
slim
）. It is very well (
good
)to a girl. This is my method of keeping health.
点评：
文章的结构安排还是比较合理的，但是内容不够充实，比较散乱。一定要加强句子之间的逻辑性。注意语法结构的正确使用。注意避免拼写错误。继续努力，加油！
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